I love that your first story is about unicorns, they're one of my mythical favorites. Your writing style is easy to follow along and was very entertaining.
I agree with Hannah, your blog looks awesome! I could totally see myself sitting in a room like that enjoying a nice, long book! I have really enjoyed reading your stories because, again like Hannah said, they are really easy to follow and flow nicely. You do a great job of making them your own and making them fun to read.
Your project introduction is very intriguing. I love that you posed questions for your readers to consider. I know when I read stories I try to imagine where the story might lead. The explanation of the two women and their travels reminded me of "Thelma and Louise." Both women seem to have things in common although maybe they don't realize that yet. It is funny how people who are alike often do not care for one another. I love the pictures associated with both your cover page and introduction. Although I have to admit, I expected to find a picture of two women associated with the introduction. The pictures does create some mystery though. Which of the two women discussed was in the picture? What does the other women look like? In that aspect it created more of an intrigue. I am definitely interested to find out why the women don't like each other. I also want to know why the husband cheated and with whom did he cheat. I cant wait to find out.
Hi Lu, I am a huge fan of Greek mythology, so I was instantly interested in your Storybook idea because it sounded like you were going to sort of re-write Greek mythology in your own version which is so cool! First things first: your website theme is great. I think it meshes really well with your Storybook topic. The image you used on the home page is perfect for the topic, too. The first two paragraphs of your introduction are great. In the third paragraph, second sentence, I think you need to change “their destinies of intertwined them” to “Their destinies have intertwined them” for it to make sense. That is just a quick little fix though! Overall, I think you did a fantastic job. The introduction was captivating and made me want to keep on reading, so I have a good feeling that the rest of your Storybook is going to be amazing. Keep up the good work!
I wanted to start by saying your introduction to your storybook was a captivating start to what I expect to be a great retelling! I really appriecated the separate introductions you gave each woman before telling about the adventure they are bound to set on. It gave me a chance to get to know them so that way when I did start reading about the plot in the third paragraph I was already invested in the journey. Another aspect I thought was great was the questions you left for the reader. It made me look forward to finding out the answers while reading.
One piece of advice I might add is to flesh out the possible thoughts behind Medea personality more so in the fourth paragraph. You added so much wonderful description to Antigone's psyche but left Medea to one sentence. While that could have been what you were going for to add mystery or retain the surprise, I would balance it out just a bit more. Regardless this was a great introduction and I cannot wait to see how this retelling unfolds!
I have to admit that the way you wrote your introduction was very original, it kept me captivated during the whole reading in order to find what is going to happen to Antigone and Medea. However, it was a good move not talking much about the actual story and instead pushing the read to continue reading the stories. What I really liked was how you kept your storybook introduction so mysterious and did not give much information about it. Even the pictures you used were very well chosen I believe because they match very well with the mysteriousness of your introduction. However, I think it would have been nice to give a little bit more information about the two woman so we can know more what to really expect in the story. Overall, it was a very good read and I am definitely looking forward to your future stories. Good luck with your storybook.
Hi there Lu! I thought the introduction to your storybook was very well thought out and I loved that it was centered around the adventures of two main characters. I believe that this storybook will be a journey that many readers will enjoy following along. I think your website template and layout went will with the theme of the storybook. I might suggest, try not to use as many patterns in colors as it is a little distracting for the reader if it gets too busy! Overall, I think your writing content was wonderful (and lucky for you that's the most important part). Incredible job! Looking forward to reading more of your stories!!
Hi Lu! You did an amazing job with your introduction. I really love how much thought you put into these stories. I think it was a great idea to introduce them separately! Having them work together should add an interesting twist since they are so different. My only recommendation is to make the pictures larger and put them at the top! I think they are a little overlooked since they are at the bottom and stacked. That is literally the only thing I would recommend! Your writing is terrific and you definitely chose an interesting topic. I am really excited to see the end of your storybook, their journey is going to be so exciting. You chose an amazing topic and so unique! I really wish I would have done something like this where there is an overall theme throughout the entire storybook. Amazing job again! Can’t wait to read it!
Lu, I like how you use original Greek mythology pictures because it adds a sense of setting and time. Many stories that I have read so far are modern versions of the original myths, but I enjoy reading the stories that keep that historical setting alive with the characters and plots. The way that you talk to the reader is persuasive and relatable, by saying "travel along with my story..." it makes the reader want to dive into the world of Antigone and Medea. I also like the premise of the stories that you are going to write. It is important to have obstacles within a story, but sometimes obstacles on a journey start to bore the reader. I like how you incorporated the feud between the two main characters. It makes the adventure much more difficult and entertaining. I definitely think including dialogue could add a possible humor factor in your story as well. The conversations and arguments that arise between Antigone and Medea could be a conflict, amongst the others they have to face.
I really liked your story and I believe it is very well written. In the beginning I was wondering why you did not have much information about what was going to happen but after reading your author’s note everything seemed to make sense. However, I suggest that you do not keep this much space between your paragraphs or at least keep the same amount of space for all of them, I think it will make it look slightly better. I really enjoyed your story and I believe the topic was very well chosen, I read stories about Antigone but in French when I was in high school and they were very nice. Moreover, I wonder why you decided to change to a different Greece and the classical one but I am sure it adds a lot of mystery to your story. Overall I found the story very nice, you did a great job! I look forward to read more of your stories.
I like the theme you are taking for your Storybook. It is very unique and interesting. I have never actually read the myths of Antigone, but I love all of Medea's myths. I think they are so great because they are so dark and mysterious. It will be interesting to see how you put together the stories of two very different women.
The theme of your storybook is also great. The classical paintings really set the mood for the reader and remind us of the era - the mystery and morbidity that was classical Greece. Is there any possible way for you to get the two pictures of Medea and Antigone side by side rather than one on top of the other? That is really my only complaint about your Introduction.
I look forward to reading some more of your stories! They seem that they will be really interesting and fun!
I think you did a great job setting up your storybook and characters in your introduction. I'm not a huge fan of Greek mythology, but I have to admit you really drew me in and made the characters seem interesting and relatable. I liked the images you included as well! They really helped build the picture even more.
The first story was really enjoyable as well! At first I was disappointed that it didn't include both characters, but it stands alone quite well, and I really liked getting to know more about Antigone. I think the picture you chose of Fate helps the reader understand her character, but it would have been cool if you stuck to the old fashioned pictures you use in your introduction. I also like that you changed it up from the original to make it more hopeful. From your author's note, it sounds like the original is really depressing!
This is great. I'm looking forward to reading more!
Hi! I think you did a wonderful job setting up your introduction and in developing your characters. I love Greek mythology and have love studying it. I think you did a great job at using what you have, but also making it your own. There are a few things that I think can improve your story and give it a little bit more pizzazz! I would love to see more dialogue within the story because I think this would build up the characters even more when dealing with their emotional appeal to the reader. Another thing that I think is a simple switch is the pictures that you have chosen. Because this is ancient, I think finding photos with a more ancient looking theme would improve the visual aspect of the story.
Hi! First of all, I think the picture on your cover page of your storybook is great. It's large and really puts me in the setting or mood for your stories. I thought the introduction was in great shape. I love the story of Antigone and the fact that you are going to give a reason for why all the tragedy happens in Greek mythology is great. I think the image you used is awesome, it paints a new picture of fate that I hadn't thought of.I got a little confused when I went to The Beginning. I thought it would be a full story but I thought it was a little short and with no author's note. Are there two introductions? Or is this a continuation of the first introduction, or is the first one a story and not an introduction? That was the only part that confused me, and that might just be me. Other than that, great job and I can't wait to read more!
I am very interested to read more about Antigone and Medea's adventure! I like how they are enemies because that just makes their journey all that more difficult and entertaining. I couldn't imagine traveling with someone I despised for so long. I really like how you included Fate as an actual character. The fact that she is actually choosing her prey is unique and entertaining! The story makes you feel so sad for Antigone and all of the things that she and her family have endured throughout their lifetimes. Yet, she is still positive and hopeful that after her journey she will live a happy life. This is inspiring because the things that she had to go through are a million times worse than anything I have had to go through in my lifetime. I loved your story and I can't wait to read about Medea and the journey that the two take together!
I love the background and layout of your storybook. I think it really brings your stories to life, and is definitely pleasing to look at. I really like how you personified fate (Fate) in your stories - she's mischievous! Your introduction to Antigone's story is great. I think it does a good job at providing background information about your original source while the last couple of sentences leave the reader curious as to what happens next. Overall I enjoyed your story about Antigone - well done! I do think there are a few minor errors, mostly grammatical or related to punctuation. You may want to skim back over and add or remove some commas. Also this line doesn't seem to belong where it's placed: "After learning the horrible news, my father blinded himself and my mother hung herself." Anyway, overall your story was very enjoyable and interesting. Keep it up!
Lu, you did a wonderful job on your layout of your storybook. It really fits what you want to convey. Wow, you did a great job with Antigone and Medea and bringing them to life and giving them personalities. This story is very sad and it really bring out your emotions for the character, Antigone. This helps with your story a lot and brings another level to your writing. There are a few things I would like to suggest. There are a few grammatical errors that can be easily identified with a quick read aloud. Overall great job and look forward to reading more.
I swore I read some of your Storybook earlier this semester. I guess not! I enjoyed the photos that your used throughout your story. I tried to do the same on my blog/portfolio. I love art so much and I can see by your choices that you have a certain respect for it (well…that’s what I’m assuming anyways). Your introduction is one of the most intriguing ones I have read this semester. I love the premise/concept of fate I think it gives you a lot of room to be creative. The introduction draws you in and that is a very hard thing to do. Wonderful job! You’re missing a few little words in Hell Hath No Fury (great title by the way!). For example, a ‘the’ In the sentence “Jason and (the) children had made Medea soft.” Other than that, I found it wonderful and entertaining. In its entirety I think you did a great job and I’m sad that I was not able to appreciate it sooner.
Hey Lu! I just want to start by saying that I was super excited to read your story since I love anything and all things that have to do with Greek Mythology. You did a great job with your website design. The background and the cover picture really add to the mystical subject that is your theme. As for your introduction, you are the first person whose storybook I read who wrote questions in their introduction. Great job adding a unique twist to your storybook. You gave us just enough information to hook us but kept a lot a mystery. Most of the other storybooks I have read have made the mistake of giving too much away which takes all the fun away of reading to find out what happens. Your writing style is so effortless in a good way. You write without it being forced and your stories flow really well. Great job!
Hey! Your storybook was really interesting to read. I did a great job in the introduction by giving us a brief intro to who the Characters were. It really made me curious and made me want to know more about their stories and how they crossed paths with each other. It lead me to the next stories. One thing I really liked was how you wrote this storybook about Fate. I loved how Fate was a character and planned this whole thing out. Sometimes people will make wrong decisions and it takes some one to help lead them in the right direction. I would have loved it if there was one more story about their lives after they went back. Overall, I truly enjoyed reading your storybook. Thank you for a great read!!
Wow I love the layout and background image for your blog! It makes it much more fun to read and is inspiring me to do more for mine.
ReplyDeleteI love that your first story is about unicorns, they're one of my mythical favorites. Your writing style is easy to follow along and was very entertaining.
ReplyDeleteI agree with Hannah, your blog looks awesome! I could totally see myself sitting in a room like that enjoying a nice, long book! I have really enjoyed reading your stories because, again like Hannah said, they are really easy to follow and flow nicely. You do a great job of making them your own and making them fun to read.
ReplyDeleteYour project introduction is very intriguing. I love that you posed questions for your readers to consider. I know when I read stories I try to imagine where the story might lead. The explanation of the two women and their travels reminded me of "Thelma and Louise." Both women seem to have things in common although maybe they don't realize that yet. It is funny how people who are alike often do not care for one another. I love the pictures associated with both your cover page and introduction. Although I have to admit, I expected to find a picture of two women associated with the introduction. The pictures does create some mystery though. Which of the two women discussed was in the picture? What does the other women look like? In that aspect it created more of an intrigue. I am definitely interested to find out why the women don't like each other. I also want to know why the husband cheated and with whom did he cheat. I cant wait to find out.
ReplyDeleteHi Lu, I am a huge fan of Greek mythology, so I was instantly interested in your Storybook idea because it sounded like you were going to sort of re-write Greek mythology in your own version which is so cool! First things first: your website theme is great. I think it meshes really well with your Storybook topic. The image you used on the home page is perfect for the topic, too. The first two paragraphs of your introduction are great. In the third paragraph, second sentence, I think you need to change “their destinies of intertwined them” to “Their destinies have intertwined them” for it to make sense. That is just a quick little fix though! Overall, I think you did a fantastic job. The introduction was captivating and made me want to keep on reading, so I have a good feeling that the rest of your Storybook is going to be amazing. Keep up the good work!
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ReplyDeleteI wanted to start by saying your introduction to your storybook was a captivating start to what I expect to be a great retelling! I really appriecated the separate introductions you gave each woman before telling about the adventure they are bound to set on. It gave me a chance to get to know them so that way when I did start reading about the plot in the third paragraph I was already invested in the journey. Another aspect I thought was great was the questions you left for the reader. It made me look forward to finding out the answers while reading.
One piece of advice I might add is to flesh out the possible thoughts behind Medea personality more so in the fourth paragraph. You added so much wonderful description to Antigone's psyche but left Medea to one sentence. While that could have been what you were going for to add mystery or retain the surprise, I would balance it out just a bit more. Regardless this was a great introduction and I cannot wait to see how this retelling unfolds!
Belle
Hey Lu,
ReplyDeleteI have to admit that the way you wrote your introduction was very original, it kept me captivated during the whole reading in order to find what is going to happen to Antigone and Medea. However, it was a good move not talking much about the actual story and instead pushing the read to continue reading the stories. What I really liked was how you kept your storybook introduction so mysterious and did not give much information about it. Even the pictures you used were very well chosen I believe because they match very well with the mysteriousness of your introduction. However, I think it would have been nice to give a little bit more information about the two woman so we can know more what to really expect in the story. Overall, it was a very good read and I am definitely looking forward to your future stories. Good luck with your storybook.
Hi there Lu! I thought the introduction to your storybook was very well thought out and I loved that it was centered around the adventures of two main characters. I believe that this storybook will be a journey that many readers will enjoy following along. I think your website template and layout went will with the theme of the storybook. I might suggest, try not to use as many patterns in colors as it is a little distracting for the reader if it gets too busy! Overall, I think your writing content was wonderful (and lucky for you that's the most important part). Incredible job! Looking forward to reading more of your stories!!
ReplyDeleteHi Lu! You did an amazing job with your introduction. I really love how much thought you put into these stories. I think it was a great idea to introduce them separately! Having them work together should add an interesting twist since they are so different. My only recommendation is to make the pictures larger and put them at the top! I think they are a little overlooked since they are at the bottom and stacked. That is literally the only thing I would recommend! Your writing is terrific and you definitely chose an interesting topic. I am really excited to see the end of your storybook, their journey is going to be so exciting. You chose an amazing topic and so unique! I really wish I would have done something like this where there is an overall theme throughout the entire storybook. Amazing job again! Can’t wait to read it!
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ReplyDeleteI like how you use original Greek mythology pictures because it adds a sense of setting and time. Many stories that I have read so far are modern versions of the original myths, but I enjoy reading the stories that keep that historical setting alive with the characters and plots. The way that you talk to the reader is persuasive and relatable, by saying "travel along with my story..." it makes the reader want to dive into the world of Antigone and Medea. I also like the premise of the stories that you are going to write. It is important to have obstacles within a story, but sometimes obstacles on a journey start to bore the reader. I like how you incorporated the feud between the two main characters. It makes the adventure much more difficult and entertaining. I definitely think including dialogue could add a possible humor factor in your story as well. The conversations and arguments that arise between Antigone and Medea could be a conflict, amongst the others they have to face.
ReplyDeleteHi Lu,
I really liked your story and I believe it is very well written. In the beginning I was wondering why you did not have much information about what was going to happen but after reading your author’s note everything seemed to make sense. However, I suggest that you do not keep this much space between your paragraphs or at least keep the same amount of space for all of them, I think it will make it look slightly better. I really enjoyed your story and I believe the topic was very well chosen, I read stories about Antigone but in French when I was in high school and they were very nice. Moreover, I wonder why you decided to change to a different Greece and the classical one but I am sure it adds a lot of mystery to your story. Overall I found the story very nice, you did a great job! I look forward to read more of your stories.
Lu,
ReplyDeleteI like the theme you are taking for your Storybook. It is very unique and interesting. I have never actually read the myths of Antigone, but I love all of Medea's myths. I think they are so great because they are so dark and mysterious. It will be interesting to see how you put together the stories of two very different women.
The theme of your storybook is also great. The classical paintings really set the mood for the reader and remind us of the era - the mystery and morbidity that was classical Greece. Is there any possible way for you to get the two pictures of Medea and Antigone side by side rather than one on top of the other? That is really my only complaint about your Introduction.
I look forward to reading some more of your stories! They seem that they will be really interesting and fun!
Hey Lu!
ReplyDeleteI think you did a great job setting up your storybook and characters in your introduction. I'm not a huge fan of Greek mythology, but I have to admit you really drew me in and made the characters seem interesting and relatable. I liked the images you included as well! They really helped build the picture even more.
The first story was really enjoyable as well! At first I was disappointed that it didn't include both characters, but it stands alone quite well, and I really liked getting to know more about Antigone. I think the picture you chose of Fate helps the reader understand her character, but it would have been cool if you stuck to the old fashioned pictures you use in your introduction. I also like that you changed it up from the original to make it more hopeful. From your author's note, it sounds like the original is really depressing!
This is great. I'm looking forward to reading more!
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ReplyDeleteI think you did a wonderful job setting up your introduction and in developing your characters. I love Greek mythology and have love studying it. I think you did a great job at using what you have, but also making it your own. There are a few things that I think can improve your story and give it a little bit more pizzazz! I would love to see more dialogue within the story because I think this would build up the characters even more when dealing with their emotional appeal to the reader. Another thing that I think is a simple switch is the pictures that you have chosen. Because this is ancient, I think finding photos with a more ancient looking theme would improve the visual aspect of the story.
Hi!
ReplyDeleteFirst of all, I think the picture on your cover page of your storybook is great. It's large and really puts me in the setting or mood for your stories. I thought the introduction was in great shape. I love the story of Antigone and the fact that you are going to give a reason for why all the tragedy happens in Greek mythology is great. I think the image you used is awesome, it paints a new picture of fate that I hadn't thought of.I got a little confused when I went to The Beginning. I thought it would be a full story but I thought it was a little short and with no author's note. Are there two introductions? Or is this a continuation of the first introduction, or is the first one a story and not an introduction? That was the only part that confused me, and that might just be me. Other than that, great job and I can't wait to read more!
Lu,
ReplyDeleteI am very interested to read more about Antigone and Medea's adventure! I like how they are enemies because that just makes their journey all that more difficult and entertaining. I couldn't imagine traveling with someone I despised for so long. I really like how you included Fate as an actual character. The fact that she is actually choosing her prey is unique and entertaining! The story makes you feel so sad for Antigone and all of the things that she and her family have endured throughout their lifetimes. Yet, she is still positive and hopeful that after her journey she will live a happy life. This is inspiring because the things that she had to go through are a million times worse than anything I have had to go through in my lifetime. I loved your story and I can't wait to read about Medea and the journey that the two take together!
Lu,
ReplyDeleteI love the background and layout of your storybook. I think it really brings your stories to life, and is definitely pleasing to look at. I really like how you personified fate (Fate) in your stories - she's mischievous!
Your introduction to Antigone's story is great. I think it does a good job at providing background information about your original source while the last couple of sentences leave the reader curious as to what happens next. Overall I enjoyed your story about Antigone - well done! I do think there are a few minor errors, mostly grammatical or related to punctuation. You may want to skim back over and add or remove some commas. Also this line doesn't seem to belong where it's placed: "After learning the horrible news, my father blinded himself and my mother hung herself." Anyway, overall your story was very enjoyable and interesting. Keep it up!
Lu, you did a wonderful job on your layout of your storybook. It really fits what you want to convey. Wow, you did a great job with Antigone and Medea and bringing them to life and giving them personalities. This story is very sad and it really bring out your emotions for the character, Antigone. This helps with your story a lot and brings another level to your writing. There are a few things I would like to suggest. There are a few grammatical errors that can be easily identified with a quick read aloud. Overall great job and look forward to reading more.
ReplyDeleteI swore I read some of your Storybook earlier this semester. I guess not! I enjoyed the photos that your used throughout your story. I tried to do the same on my blog/portfolio. I love art so much and I can see by your choices that you have a certain respect for it (well…that’s what I’m assuming anyways). Your introduction is one of the most intriguing ones I have read this semester. I love the premise/concept of fate I think it gives you a lot of room to be creative. The introduction draws you in and that is a very hard thing to do. Wonderful job!
ReplyDeleteYou’re missing a few little words in Hell Hath No Fury (great title by the way!). For example, a ‘the’ In the sentence “Jason and (the) children had made Medea soft.” Other than that, I found it wonderful and entertaining. In its entirety I think you did a great job and I’m sad that I was not able to appreciate it sooner.
Hey Lu! I just want to start by saying that I was super excited to read your story since I love anything and all things that have to do with Greek Mythology. You did a great job with your website design. The background and the cover picture really add to the mystical subject that is your theme. As for your introduction, you are the first person whose storybook I read who wrote questions in their introduction. Great job adding a unique twist to your storybook. You gave us just enough information to hook us but kept a lot a mystery. Most of the other storybooks I have read have made the mistake of giving too much away which takes all the fun away of reading to find out what happens. Your writing style is so effortless in a good way. You write without it being forced and your stories flow really well. Great job!
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ReplyDeleteYour storybook was really interesting to read. I did a great job in the introduction by giving us a brief intro to who the Characters were. It really made me curious and made me want to know more about their stories and how they crossed paths with each other. It lead me to the next stories. One thing I really liked was how you wrote this storybook about Fate. I loved how Fate was a character and planned this whole thing out. Sometimes people will make wrong decisions and it takes some one to help lead them in the right direction. I would have loved it if there was one more story about their lives after they went back. Overall, I truly enjoyed reading your storybook. Thank you for a great read!!